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Psychic vampires wanting what they can never permanently have
Attempt to hold on to something once briefly held
In your back they will stab
Fantastic party people of the past have slipped away into obscurity
Living like solitary hermits in their chosen prison cell
Keeping in touch with friends in e-mails
This can never replace actually spending time together
Masses of phantoms wandering aimlessly, righteously prioritizing their illusory lives
And for what endeavors do we all strive
The lunacy of obligatory & compulsory selfishness
contradictory hipocrisy reigns supreme
In the land of those that pretend to be living
Dead phantoms dominate the landscape
Haunted phantoms
Dead, haunted, sad, miserable, phantoms full of despair.
Haunted phantoms walk in the darkness grasping for the light that is but a dream
They hope and pray for something that's not there.
These haunted phantoms
Attempt to hold on to something once briefly held
In your back they will stab
Fantastic party people of the past have slipped away into obscurity
Living like solitary hermits in their chosen prison cell
Keeping in touch with friends in e-mails
This can never replace actually spending time together
Masses of phantoms wandering aimlessly, righteously prioritizing their illusory lives
And for what endeavors do we all strive
The lunacy of obligatory & compulsory selfishness
contradictory hipocrisy reigns supreme
In the land of those that pretend to be living
Dead phantoms dominate the landscape
Haunted phantoms
Dead, haunted, sad, miserable, phantoms full of despair.
Haunted phantoms walk in the darkness grasping for the light that is but a dream
They hope and pray for something that's not there.
These haunted phantoms
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Re: PHANTOMS
Fri, March 14, 2008 - 10:02 PMAnd I think it's lame when people say "And?"
And that's all I felt like writing and might write something else later. Not sure. I'm new to this tribe and thought I'd jump in. Maybe I should just delete the thread and go. -
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Sat, March 15, 2008 - 1:19 PMWell, if you have a problem writing bad poetry and needs some pointers, this is the place. Fer instance, you could write a bad poem about "And?" people. I suppose the problem is that your poem just hasn't sunk low enough in my estimation to be truly bad. I mean, how can you ruin those prose? I suppose it would be annoying poetry to write some good poetry and then delete it...kind of a protest against bad poetry? But, what, after all, is your goal? (see tribe description)
So, rewrite it with a few "Ands?" thrown in to spice it up a bit and then you'll have something truly bad. See other threads for excruciating wreading, and?, ryting anon. -
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Re: PHANTOMS
Mon, March 17, 2008 - 3:41 PMMan you are a kind man TMIbo…
What excellent advice!
But the kid had a good start with psychic vampires…
And it is ironic that the material slams digital communication while using digital communication to send its message…. hmmmm -
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Re: PHANTOMS
Mon, March 17, 2008 - 9:19 PMNope. Just not edgy enough. Here's an example of something a bit edgier (an excellent word to use in a bad poem, BTW--in fact, perhaps I'll use that as the first or last name of a character in a short story sometime; sort of a misspelling on a birth certificate of 'Edgar' or 'Edgeré'?):
Oh, forget it.
I am too lazy to find the URL.
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Re: PHANTOMS
Tue, March 18, 2008 - 9:26 PM'Edgy'?
Let's take it way over the top and then kick it up a notch.
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Re: PHANTOMS
Tue, March 18, 2008 - 9:27 PMpersonally Im more intrigued by the melodrama of it all deleting the thread as if the poem was unwanted.
us dark phantoms of the digital world hang on the very thread you threaten to pull I mean jesus man If you want to destroy my sweater
Hold this thread as I walk away. Watch me unravel, I'll soon be naked. Lying on the floor lying on the floor I've come undone -
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Re: PHANTOMS
Tue, March 18, 2008 - 9:50 PM'I no longer love the color of your sweater.'
-Laurie Anderson -
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Re: PHANTOMS
Sun, March 23, 2008 - 10:21 PMOh so sorry I dont suck bad enough.
Later.
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This is the maximum depth. Additional responses will not be threaded.
Re: PHANTOMS
Mon, March 24, 2008 - 1:40 AMHey, we can't all be in the past continuous. -
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Re: PHANTOMS
Mon, February 16, 2009 - 2:56 PMMore cowbell comin' right up!
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"And": An Assay
The strange wind pressed on everything at once--
A door blew open in one room, a vase fell in another.
It is not unlike the word "and": omnipresent even unseen.
'Before' disappears.
'After' transforms into others.
"And"--that strong rock--stays standing.
Undevourable thus of connection. Even death spits it back.
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Re: PHANTOMS
Sat, February 21, 2009 - 6:07 AM...Death AND Taxes
--Dorothy Parker (caps and ellipses mine)
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